the last dime

Well, this is a rough draft but I don't care. I have to see it somewhere in order to process what it looks like and what needs work. It's in the pantoum format.

You told her you'd be there and let that last dime drop

into his hands, and he'd paid you twenty.

When you told her about watching his heart pop,

she cried and you tried to hug her plenty.

Into his hands, and he'd paid you twenty

dollars he'd earned while dreaming of you...

she cried and you tried to hug her plenty,

but you were the one who gave him the blue.

Dollars he'd earned while dreaming of you..

they were supposed to bring home some food,

but you were the one who gave him the blue,

and now he knows the maker of good.

They were supposed to bring home some food-

She ached when she knew that they'd brought you some more,

and now he knows the maker of good.

Fast blow's only worth hard cash to the poor.

She ached when she knew that they'd brought you some more,

When you told her about watching his heart pop-

Fast blow's only worth hard cash to the poor....

You told her you'd be there and let the last dime drop.